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haikaiTALKS: a saturday gathering! ONE-LINE haiku

Updated: Apr 2, 2023

haikaiTALKS: ONE-LINE HAIKU - a saturday gathering_under the banyan tree


host: Richa Sharma


1st April, 2023


Seasonality


Part 1


At all times, discussions have mostly emphasized the usage of a “seasonal word” (kigo) in writing poetry. Using a seasonal reference has been considered vital as a form of polite greeting.


Saijiki (poetic seasonal almanacs) systematically categorize almost all aspects of nature and much of human activity by the cycle of the four seasons.


The agricultural heritage in each country makes us all very sensitive to the cycle of four seasons.


Haiku is a genre in which not only images of nature are constructed according to cultural perceptions, but it also contributes to shaping our social and cultural attitudes toward the environment.


as I walk the earth moves on birdsong


Kala Ramesh


Presence, November 2022


Ever since I read this poem, it has stayed with me on my nature walks. But that's not only what it's about. Is one life enough to truly walk the earth? What debts do we owe to mother earth? Perhaps, an entire life is lived in a birdsong. Isn't it amazing to know that the Earth constantly reminds us that each life form will come again and again? We may be already immortal. The poem revolves and rotates like planet Earth. A mesmerizing poem about unconditional karma and balances.


river mist rising cremation mound


Sonam Chhoki


Otata 9, September 2016


This monoku reminds me of our difficult times during the second Covid-19 wave in India in 2021. After surviving that phase, my views on life and happiness have gone through important positive changes.


redwood silence from a different century


Cherie Hunter Day


The Heron’s Nest XVII: 4 (December 2015); Awarded Second Runner-up Readers’ Choice for Poem of the Year 2015


I love her work and can't help but read this poem again and again. Thinking about everything that humanity has gone through, this “silence” has cosmic reverberations. Are we really trying to make this world a better place for our future generations? This poem offers a vast space for soul-searching.


dust storm the more I try to see the less I see


Minal Sarosh

whiptail journal

Issue 1: Kinetic (November 2021)


I live in a place where dust storms are a characteristic feature of summer, especially in April, May, and June. The philosophical dimensions of this one-line poem are such that each reading gives birth to a new realization via an old perception.

Though the examples may not strictly relate climate and culture, it will be interesting to try some poems that can express a country's culture through its climate and topography.


Thank you!


Stay blessed!


Richa


Source


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Shirane, Haruo. Japan and the Culture of the Four Seasons Nature, Literature, and the Arts. Columbia University Press, 2012.

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Kala Ramesh
Kala Ramesh
Apr 07, 2023

https://www.trivenihaikai.in/post/celebration Poems selected for haikuKATHA - Issue 18 is up at CELEBRATION! Check it out! The issue goes LIVE on . . . yes! You got it right!! On 22nd April.

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RS
RS
Apr 07, 2023

I don't know how comprehensive this is according to the detailed requirements , but it does cover a lot about the careful usage of “kigo” in haiku poetry. Putting all relevant links here will enable people to easily connect to the topic of discussion.


https://haikutopics.blogspot.com/2006/05/mizuhara-hana-no-ame.html?m=1


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marilyn ashbaugh
marilyn ashbaugh
Apr 05, 2023

#2 4/4/23 feedback welcome


rev 1 thank you, Alan!


folding its scent into her shawl flower chill


<<<<>>>>

folding scent into her shawl flower chill


(flower chill is a spring kigo)

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marilyn ashbaugh
marilyn ashbaugh
Apr 05, 2023
Replying to

Alan,

thank you! it is the season's scent after being outside. i will revise.

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Kala Ramesh
Kala Ramesh
Apr 04, 2023

Thanks a million, Alan. I love your suggestion! living fantasy debris sweeping bamboo shadows


But in this version - it's debris sweeping the bamboo shadows, right. I want:

living fantasy bamboo shadows sweeping the debris


Does this sound close to my intention?

Or

living fantasy on bamboo shadows sweeping the debris


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Wow! So much is happening here!


living on fantasy the debris swept with bamboo shadows


?

feedback most welcome.

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Alan Summers
Alan Summers
Apr 05, 2023
Replying to

fantasy bamboo shadows sweeping the debris

or

living fantasy bamboo shadows sweep the debris


maybe?

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RS
RS
Apr 04, 2023

Revised versions open to feedback. Thank you, Alan, Kala, and Linda for all the excellent suggestions. I am keeping everything as is for each edit step to be visible.


1.


the flower vendor's cricket rain delays wedding


2.


Japanese rain . . . the flower vendor's bicycle delays the wedding


3.


Indian rain . . . the flower vendor's bicycle delays the wedding 4. As Alan suggested: *cricket rain . . . the flower vendor's bicycle delayed by a wedding


5


woodpecker rain . . .

the flower vendor's bicycle

delayed by a wedding


6


the flower vendor selling rain


*The game of cricket is a craze in India in every nook and alley. The word 'cricket' is also multi-layered in meaning.


In response to Keiko's kigo prompt. Unable…


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RS
RS
Apr 05, 2023
Replying to

Awesome monoku version. Thank you! the flower vendor selling rain


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