haikaiTALKS: a saturday gathering! FOUR-LINE haiku
- Kala Ramesh
- Jul 15, 2023
- 1 min read
haikaiTALKS: ONE-LINE HAIKU - a saturday gathering_under the banyan tree
host: Kala Ramesh
15th July 2023
Yeah! We continue four-line this week too!
I have a new request and a suggestion to make.
Can you share a four-line ku that you've enjoyed & tell your readers why you liked it and how you understood it. For your own poems: Only TWO four-line ku per week, per prompt, per poet.
First post: You'll search and find a four-line haiku, you like.
You'll give your reason/s why you like it. Second post: This will be your first four-line ku.
Third post:
This will be your second 4-line ku.
Please give your feedback on others' commentary and poems too. _()_
Sample poem:
More of Basho's four-line ku: https://terebess.hu/english/haiku/basho2.html
a lotus
out of the muck
the flowering
within
Kala Ramesh
From the author's book: beyond the horizon beyond - 2017
Have fun! Keep writing and commenting!
#2, revised, thank you so much Alan.
stretched shadows in short rhythm tugs the caw across a monsoon wind
Original
monsoon winds
the crow's caws
in short rhythm pulls
its stretched shadow
Feedback please
#3 feedback welcome
rev. 1 thank you, Alan!
pain
of a galaxy
the heart's
bee hum <<<<>>>>>
growing pains
of a galaxy
the heart
of a bee's hum
#1, Revised, thanks Alan. It reads so good. 20-7-2023
when did I ever thank you mother is there a season
Original
when was
the last time i said
thank you to my mother
spring flower falls
feedback please
Really loved the lines below, written by Basho's friend Sora as he said goodbye. What to explain about death?
No matter where I fall
On the road
Fall will I to be buried
Among the flowering bush-clovers.
A query:
Why are most of the 4-line a senryu?